不要让这6种开头毁了你的美国研究生文书！-pg女王夺宝

     美国研究生文书是一个展示自我的好机会，因此对美国研究生文书的写作要认真。下面是pg女王夺宝主页菌给大家介绍的在美国研究生文书写作时要避免的6种开头，一起了解吧~

一、重复简历型

i earned my bachelor of science degree in … sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university

点评：不要去重复简历中的东西，这在很多学校的ps要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。

二、学校介绍型

i am an undergraduate in…university , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in china.

点评：该同学的ps开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒拒掉。

三、抄袭句式型

as a student majoring in computer science, i began my odyssey since i entered undergraduate program. indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, i am more than greedy for something new.

点评：odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。

四、救世主型

i am a problem solver. i have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. since i was a little boy, a voice from president franklin roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "the world can be changed by man's endeavor, …

点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。ps的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。

五、犹抱琵琶型

making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .at present, i have come to a critical point in my life when i have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, i make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in xxx. and i choose to specialize in communications which i will pursue a lifelong career.

点评：重点放在自己要做重大决定上了，人生的转折点，然后来上句所谓名言警句，这是浪费字数。在有限的字数里，同学们应该学会直接，并且抓住重点，突出自己最有优势的方面，最有特色的方面。

六、忆童年型

“why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-”“why the leaves turn red in autumn”how many stars are there in the sky-' when i was in childhood,i always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。i am especially interested in how things work, i can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

点评：上来就回忆童年少年自己如何有着远大抱负，who cares?个人陈述字数有限，却用这么多话描述童年，没有任何意义。学校想知道你如何看待未来，而不是如何度过过去。

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